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vance101
February 14th, 2005, 04:45 PM
Old man lookin' upon that wall
He is old and wise, and such or so tall
he stares at an open gaze,
or up to the heavens in the wisest ways
When we looks the ages you can see
The things he has done,
Places he has been
Ways he has seen,
No ware to a-dream

You think he has seen it all?
or do you think he is so wise,
he does not talk, only his eye brows rise...

As even his tongue does not exist, he makes not sound
nor does he prosiest.
Eyes open in a wide gaze
You look strait back in a foggy haze...

Starting to wonder?
Starting to think?
Starting to believe he is yet to be that mind that thinks!
The one man who has yet to be discovered,
Hiddin’ in the clouds for all others

Could have been rich?
Cancer he has cured?
Bah! NEVER, he cant, so rest assured.

Ages he has seen makes no protest
no one knowledge is yet in contest.
Until he has spoken that last word,
No contribution?
"No comment sir"

KevinBrowning
February 17th, 2005, 08:50 PM
Good premise, but the spelling and grammar could use some work. The rhyming is pretty good though, with a few exceptions.

vance101
February 18th, 2005, 03:16 PM
i spell checked it =)