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Iluvatar
March 21st, 2006, 02:44 AM
Hues

The deepest blue
Describeth not
My inner hue
The color thought

A muted brown
Tells as well
The earthen down
My outer shell.

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Her hair is black
Her humor dark
Work ethic slack
Her wit is sharp.

This person, erratic
But with sense of duty
She’s multi-chromatic
But bright with beauty.





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Bill

A line, progressing slowly
He marches
The bored and the tired
He stares ahead
Waiting for their turn at salvation
Shell-shocked and broken
Children Moaning, parents groaning
He is alone in line
Priests glaring kindly
He pauses
The line moves on
Around him,

Purple curtains

crimson carpets,

fluid candles
The line marches on
He stares around him,
The warmth speading through him
The line walks on,

becoming irate

they’re getting late

Someone growls politely
“Move it!”

His epiphany broken
Dreary people
He stares ahead
Lines of dirty followers
His vacant eyes
Looking for salvation
His mind is shattered
Always searching
He is gone.

Brittany
April 5th, 2006, 10:36 AM
i love to write to so i thought id share one of my poems with you
shattered past
i can never love again
because the day you walked in i new right away we were going to be friends
but things changed you forgot about me
and throw me away
and the saddest part is i never stop thinking about you not even for a day
i always wonder how you are and if your okay
but you told me to move on and go away
but you stole a chunk of my heart that day
and without it
i cant replace the shattered past that i new just wouldn't last
so forgive me when i ask
can i have the peaces back?

Mr. Hyde
April 6th, 2006, 08:07 PM
All nicely written poems.

The lightening look of your third poem Iluv, any special meaning there?

Iluvatar
April 7th, 2006, 09:17 AM
The lightening look of your third poem Iluv, any special meaning there?
Somewhat. Each line in that poem is alternating perspectives, almost. The lines that drift to the right are, among other things, indicating that that grouping of lines is all one perspective.